盘点留学生在essay写作中常见的14个错误（下）

发表时间:2018-05-21 08:58:07 作者:zhangxin 阅读:104次

能够接着上篇文章坚持看到这里，证明你已经很有决心提高写作成绩。下面如果还能坚持看完，你就有很大概率可以彻底解决essay写作中这14个错误。并且让它不再出现！具体的就跟Meeloun小编一起来看看吧！

      第八个错误：无力的形容词

      除了词穷，和懒惰，没法彻底解释这个错误的原因。比如：nice, good, bad这些看似正确，实际却没有办法展现描述作用的形容词，都是应该彻底避免的。

      比如：
      Seoul is a good city for tourists. 

      可以改为：
      Seoul has a lot of facilities for tourists. 

      第九个错误：轻易地使用Get

      get通常多见于口语表达，因为有太多更精准的动词可以替代它。

      比如：
      The CEO was hospitalised after he got pneumonia.

      可以改为：
      The CEO was hospitalised after he caught pneumonia.

      又或者：
      Traditionally, children get presents from their parents on Christmas Day. 

      可以改为：
      Traditionally, children receive presents from their parents on Christmas Day. 

      第十个错误：毫无意义的重复

      这个错误有点类似中文里的，凯旋归来。凯旋原本就有胜利归来的意思。再加归来，这个“回”的动作就重复了。

      比如：
      Students should learn and study English from a young age. 

      可以改为：
      Students should study English from a young age.

      又比如：
      Americans from the United States have higher rates of lung cancer. 

      可以改为：
      People from the United States have higher rates of lung cancer. 

      第十一个错误：使用个人经历作例子

      看到这儿，“杠精”又要跳出来了，只能用想到个人经历做例子了，难道不行吗？当然没有问题，但记住哪怕使用个人例子，你也要把语气调整到正式的环境下。

      比如：
      My parents frequently work late in order to make ends meet, and this has a big impact on the amount of time I get to communicate with them. 

      改为：
      My parents today are working longer hours in order to sufficiently provide for their children, which is having an enormous impact on the amount available time for face to face communication. 

      第十二个错误：表达过于冗长

      怎么判断句子写的冗长？很简单，把句子里单词一个个去掉，看哪些去掉后，意思不变就代表这个词多余了！

      举个例子：
      Even if employees engage in their jobs for a long time, they often fail to climb the business ladder, which is regularly the most common goal, therefore, they must face the harsh reality of staying in the same position for years. 

      改为：
      Even if employees stay in one job for a long time, they will often fail to climb the business ladder. 

      第十三个错误：不使用连接词

      连接词，除了让句子语气更通顺，还有个好处，是让读者可以提前判断句子之间的逻辑关系。

      比如：
      Mexicans will prefer Madrid as their most visited city. Americans will most likely go to Paris. Canadians love traveling to Istanbul the most.

      改为：
      To begin with, Mexicans will prefer Madrid as their most visited city. In contrast, Americans will most like to go to Paris. Lastly, Canadians love traveling to Istanbul the most.

      最后一个：不使用高级词汇

      这个与你积累单词有很大关系，同义词的用法是最佳扩展方法。动词，形容词，词组搭配是最容易扩展的。

      比如：
      Recent research done by Harvard University shows that 65% of Americans work more than 50 hours a week.

      改为：
      Recent research conducted by Havard University shows that 65% of Americans work more than 50 hours a week.

      这些个小错误，看似都无伤大雅，可一旦出现若干个，那么essay的整体水平，就会被无形的压低。到头来你会说，明明写的又对，又能论证，还不跑题，为何老师总是为难我过不了7呢？答案其实就在这里了。平日里，养成一个优秀的写作习惯，能够潜移默化的提高你写作水平。